In this photo is where The Little Village opens up to the outdoors. There are trees in the middle of the outdoor patio that branch over the entire space. There are even lights in the trees which probably turn on when it gets dark out. I like that idea that the outdoor space is still usable in the evening time. There is a sign to the left that calls this space “The Backyard” and below is it says “smoking area”. I like that they call this space the backyard because it gives it a homey feeling. Its not like a tourist like area but more of a backyard that is located behind a home. Once again the local vibe is given off. Also, the fact that they have a location specifically designated for smokers shows that they are willing to make accommodations for their customers. Tuesday, February 8, 2011
The Backyard
In this photo is where The Little Village opens up to the outdoors. There are trees in the middle of the outdoor patio that branch over the entire space. There are even lights in the trees which probably turn on when it gets dark out. I like that idea that the outdoor space is still usable in the evening time. There is a sign to the left that calls this space “The Backyard” and below is it says “smoking area”. I like that they call this space the backyard because it gives it a homey feeling. Its not like a tourist like area but more of a backyard that is located behind a home. Once again the local vibe is given off. Also, the fact that they have a location specifically designated for smokers shows that they are willing to make accommodations for their customers. 
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Peer Review Sheet – Assignment One: Visual/Spatial Analysis
ReplyDeletePeer Reviewer: Julia Pastrano Writer: Peppiina Niemi
1) First, begin with the photos and critical captions. Which critical captions were most effective in helping you see and understand the space as the writer does and why?
The captions for the photos really helped me understand what part of “The Village” I was looking at and that you were describing. You left it plain and simple and I think that worked in your favor.
2) Each critical caption should make a claim, support the claim with evidence/details from the text (photo or space), and analyze how the writer sees/understands those details so that the reader is invited to see/understand them in a similar way. How effectively does the writer make clear claims, support them with evidence, and elucidate her/his analysis? Does the analysis offer new knowledge, i.e. make an interesting claim supported with evidence? Explain.
a. Note 1-2 places in the blog where the writer does this particularly well.
You get in to some great analysis in the gift shop area. You really start to try and convince the reader why the things are the way they are. The area where you talk about the wall color and how that may have been influenced by the culture of Tucson.
b. Note 1-2 places in the blog where the writer might build upon the claim/support/analysis paradigm.
You describe the pictures nicely but I didn’t see much of one solid analysis. If you go in to more depth throughout the essay about why you chose a particular spot or how that spot was influenced by culture or marketing. What you have is good but if you just add a bit to it can be great.
3) As a result of this analysis, readers should begin to see a relationship between the photos taken of the space. What major themes/ideas define the relationship you see between these photos? If the relationship is unclear or undeveloped, what can the writer do to establish a clear relationship between the photos?
One major theme that you use and touch on in each photo is the rustic or welcoming feel of everything. If you just go more in depth about the place and the culture or vibe you can easily tie all of the pictures together and have a solid theme.
Peer Review Sheet – Assignment One: Visual/Spatial Analysis
ReplyDeletePeer Reviewer: Julia Pastrano Writer: Peppiina Niemi
4) Comment upon the design of the blog. Is the blog’s visual design easy to read, professional in appearance, and in sync with the purpose? Do you have any suggestions for improving upon the design?
I enjoyed the aesthetics of the blog, it was professional yet welcoming and it really tied into the pictures. The only thing I would touch on is the format, it is not all in unison, for example some titles are spaced far from the pictures but this is a small detail.
5) Consider the writer’s choice of words and the tone s/he uses in the blog. Do these choices seem appropriate for the target audience (English 102 students and instructors)? Are there any places in the text where the choices seem out of sync with the target audience?
I really enjoyed the way the blog was written, it gave the illusion that I was there and it also helped me feel the vibe of “The Village” much more than just viewing the pictures did.
6) What are the greatest strengths of this draft? Try to identify 1-3 specific things the writer does well.
You really give great descriptions I feel that it would mean just as much even if I hadn’t seen the pictures. You also give a good amount of your own ideas and thoughts without it seeming like you are making things up, I feel it really builds your credibility and trust with the reader.
7) List 2-4 specific suggestions you have for the writer as s/he moves forward in her/his revisions.
Try and tie all of the pictures together with a broad theme and then individually talk about them (as you did). I think that a central theme is the only thing you really need to work on. Editing and grammar checks are also somethings that I feel the blog can benefit from.
8) Re-read the introduction. Based on the introduction alone:
a. In your own words, what is the thesis or main idea of this visual/spatial analysis?
“The Village” is a great place that really represents the area around it and makes you feel welcome and at home because of the décor.
b. How effective is the introduction in capturing your attention? What suggestions do you have for improving upon the introduction?
The introduction gives a good feel of what 4th Ave is like and that in turn reflects what the shop has to offer. You might just want to go more in depth.
c. If there isn’t an introduction, offer ways in which the author can begin the blog.
9) Now, read the conclusion. What main ideas/points are you left with as a reader? How closely do these points relate to claims made earlier in the blog? Do you have any suggestions for improving upon the conclusion? If there isn’t a conclusion, offer ways in which the author can begin a conclusion.
I actually am really interested in visiting this place. It seems like a nice place to go with friends and just hang out. You might want to add in a little conclusion and connect it back to your intro and 4th Ave.